cedara (
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2009-01-02 10:16 am (UTC)
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Nice work, I liked that. Keep it up, you got a good handle on them.
Two minor typos though, if you don't mind:
He ran his tongue along the brunette’s lower lip, asking permission and smirking inwardly as Wilson let him in.
I believe that ought to be "brunet's" (since Wilson's a guy)
“Hey!” the blonde whined, reflexively jumping away from House.
Same basic idea, it should be "blond", referring to Chase (blond = male, blonde = female)
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Two minor typos though, if you don't mind:
He ran his tongue along the brunette’s lower lip, asking permission and smirking inwardly as Wilson let him in.
I believe that ought to be "brunet's" (since Wilson's a guy)
“Hey!” the blonde whined, reflexively jumping away from House.
Same basic idea, it should be "blond", referring to Chase (blond = male, blonde = female)